I don't like it.But at last you are trying to improve it as i see ... u made 3 versions already xD Try harder , watch some tuts and try to make it "cleaner" i personally don't like fancy stuff ...and the text isn't good , because it's hard to read it.Good luck for the next version.
TIP : You can keep the render with the boy but modify it a little bit ..change the color of that red shirt and make the tie black grey .. Make a simple BG .. i don't understand why u creaded that tentacles in the BG it looks like an ailien for me . Make Something simple for the BG
PS:If you are telling to some 1 that his work sux then tell him which part of it sux and why ... don't just say "That Suck!"