Well, it's a tag with potential.
What do I mean?It has a good basic structure and could be much better.
However, it lacks of many things. First and foremost, the focal point is abused with so many effects/fractals/c4d's .
Just clear them with the eraser!
Secondly, the light effects are bad..Some gradients, photofilter and levels would do the job.
You know, you shouldn't just paste the c4d/stock/whatever in and put it to "lighten" !
Play with the opacity, move it a bit, erase some parts that look bad..Even smudge it.
Try reading some tuts based on depth, flow and lighting ! ;)